Excellent story, Steve. Wild stuff...love all of your details and descriptions. "...last year's robot dogs..." "...falling like the store's everyday prices." Nice ending (no pun intended).
The turnaround--crook doing a good deed while working as a crook--works perfectly. The little details of the store and the crowd's herd mentality well well described and served the story well.
I had a great time writing this one and an even better day/night reading what everyone else did. Some great talent out there. Found another 14 or so blogs to add to my breakfast reading. Looks like I'll be working through a second bowl of bran flakes each morning.
Anyway, thanks a bunch for stopping by and taking the trouble to comment. Glad you enjoyed the story. There's another Oscar story coming out in January. And the story that takes place just before this one, when Oscar is on his way to Chicago, is being published in February. Probably more than you wanted to know, but there ya go. Thanks, again.
Excellent, excellent reading. I slumped down after a hard day and thoroughly enjoyed these flashes of brilliance. Please stop by BEAT to a PULP sometime and drop a story. Actually, one of you have and I'm proud to say I will be publishing it this coming February.
Excellent story, Steve. Wild stuff...love all of your details and descriptions. "...last year's robot dogs..." "...falling like the store's everyday prices." Nice ending (no pun intended).
ReplyDeleteNice -- ham off the roof. Be thinking about that for a while.
ReplyDeleteIn the toy aisle? really? That's awesome. Well done.
ReplyDeleteGod, this had my heart pounding. Great details. Good story!
ReplyDeleteThe turnaround--crook doing a good deed while working as a crook--works perfectly. The little details of the store and the crowd's herd mentality well well described and served the story well.
ReplyDeleteGreat job.,
Now I wanna know what happens at that meeting in New York.
ReplyDeleteNothing punctuates an unequivocal statement like a baseball bat. Nice story.
ReplyDeleteDamn. "A Christmas ham off a roof." Outstanding!
ReplyDeleteGreat story, Steve - full of pace and tension. Very well done.
ReplyDeleteWeddle, somebody better buy your damn book and they need to buy it soon. You've got some serious skills going on, Great story!
ReplyDeleteLove it. Nothing like baseball to teach a kid lessons about life.
ReplyDeleteeach time you writer something new your timing and descriptions are getting better and better. This is tight and fast, the perfect story.
ReplyDeleteA real rush. Smashing story.
ReplyDeleteThanks for all the kind words.
ReplyDeleteI had a great time writing this one and an even better day/night reading what everyone else did. Some great talent out there. Found another 14 or so blogs to add to my breakfast reading. Looks like I'll be working through a second bowl of bran flakes each morning.
Anyway, thanks a bunch for stopping by and taking the trouble to comment. Glad you enjoyed the story. There's another Oscar story coming out in January. And the story that takes place just before this one, when Oscar is on his way to Chicago, is being published in February. Probably more than you wanted to know, but there ya go. Thanks, again.
I especially liked your fight choreography. Dramatic finale, too.
ReplyDeleteWow! This is fantastic and all the details, so perfect.
ReplyDeleteExcellent, excellent reading. I slumped down after a hard day and thoroughly enjoyed these flashes of brilliance. Please stop by BEAT to a PULP sometime and drop a story. Actually, one of you have and I'm proud to say I will be publishing it this coming February.
ReplyDeleteOnce again, kudos on the writing.
Good job!
ReplyDeleteLoved this, Steve. Visceral, real, stunning imagery. Great tension and pacing!
ReplyDeleteNice, and all that without steroids. The Babe would be proud.
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